Thanks for presenting. I was a fig lover so this area is interesting to me.
This is a really hard topic since it's hard to understand the significance of the jj contributions without explaining a ton of internal details like Piper, CitC, TAP, blaze, etc. I think you struck a good balance here.
I don't think you need to "be more engaging" or be more passionate, and when people say that, it indicates they aren't engaged, but it's not a useful suggestion of how to improve.
I think the main issue was that on just about every slide, I found myself wanting to read ahead on the slides instead of waiting to listen to you talk. There are a couple factors to this:
1. Impatience. I want to ingest information faster. Believe it or not, the "talk slowly" advice is usually not good for a technical talk with decent acoustics. E.g. listen to a talk by Bryan Cantrill and notice how fast he talks while still being clear. Rehearsal helps, but if you simplify your slides, you can also make them easier to perform. Listen to a random slide in your video and notice how much time is filled with silence or filler words.
2. Scanning the slide because I'm unsynchronized with the speaker. E.g. if everything you say isn't clearly correlated with the content of the slide in a linear way, then I have to scan the slide to attempt to "resychronize" and figure out what bullet you are on. Sometimes presenters don't want to read the bullets verbatim, which makes it difficult to match up the spoken language with the written language, whereas if you said the first word in a bullet, I could quickly seek to that line. Skipping bullets also causes this, especially at the end of a slide, since then I want to try to read all the bullets on a slide ahead of you in case you decide to skip them in the future.
Fewer bullets per slide and fewer words per bullet help with both of these. Aggressively cut or summarize material so you don't have to skip over anything (e.g. instead of listing 6 jj piper commands and only talking about 2, list just 2 and write the number of total commands e.g. "we added 22 subcommands including mail and submit"). Put extra material (if any) in an appendix after the end if you think you might have extra time or want to use it for Q&A. Rehearse until you can belt out what you want to say on each slide without fillers or pauses (and record yourself so you can tell how much you are doing this). When I'm sharing my screen, I actually like to point my mouse cursor at the bullet I'm on so nobody has to guess where we are, but sometimes that's not available.
Your first slides essentially teach the audience how to consume your talk. E.g. a good pattern is if (1) all your bullets are short (2) you read every bullet verbatim, elaborate on that bullet for a bit, and then repeat on the next bullet. If you stick with a pattern like that, then your audience knows how to follow along. Other patterns work too.
I'm sorry this wasn't shorter and I hope it's helpful.
This is a really hard topic since it's hard to understand the significance of the jj contributions without explaining a ton of internal details like Piper, CitC, TAP, blaze, etc. I think you struck a good balance here.
I don't think you need to "be more engaging" or be more passionate, and when people say that, it indicates they aren't engaged, but it's not a useful suggestion of how to improve.
I think the main issue was that on just about every slide, I found myself wanting to read ahead on the slides instead of waiting to listen to you talk. There are a couple factors to this:
1. Impatience. I want to ingest information faster. Believe it or not, the "talk slowly" advice is usually not good for a technical talk with decent acoustics. E.g. listen to a talk by Bryan Cantrill and notice how fast he talks while still being clear. Rehearsal helps, but if you simplify your slides, you can also make them easier to perform. Listen to a random slide in your video and notice how much time is filled with silence or filler words.
2. Scanning the slide because I'm unsynchronized with the speaker. E.g. if everything you say isn't clearly correlated with the content of the slide in a linear way, then I have to scan the slide to attempt to "resychronize" and figure out what bullet you are on. Sometimes presenters don't want to read the bullets verbatim, which makes it difficult to match up the spoken language with the written language, whereas if you said the first word in a bullet, I could quickly seek to that line. Skipping bullets also causes this, especially at the end of a slide, since then I want to try to read all the bullets on a slide ahead of you in case you decide to skip them in the future.
Fewer bullets per slide and fewer words per bullet help with both of these. Aggressively cut or summarize material so you don't have to skip over anything (e.g. instead of listing 6 jj piper commands and only talking about 2, list just 2 and write the number of total commands e.g. "we added 22 subcommands including mail and submit"). Put extra material (if any) in an appendix after the end if you think you might have extra time or want to use it for Q&A. Rehearse until you can belt out what you want to say on each slide without fillers or pauses (and record yourself so you can tell how much you are doing this). When I'm sharing my screen, I actually like to point my mouse cursor at the bullet I'm on so nobody has to guess where we are, but sometimes that's not available.
Your first slides essentially teach the audience how to consume your talk. E.g. a good pattern is if (1) all your bullets are short (2) you read every bullet verbatim, elaborate on that bullet for a bit, and then repeat on the next bullet. If you stick with a pattern like that, then your audience knows how to follow along. Other patterns work too.
I'm sorry this wasn't shorter and I hope it's helpful.